Kippur Critiques

I don't know if this is going to get finished. Though if I'm nagged enough, it actually might.

It started out as a sort of Rp/whack_a_sue entry and has kind of gotten a bit out of hand.

Orion, Maddy, Kev and Lan belong to canadianevil while Trever and Kale belong to me. They're vampires in an Rp we do and we started messing around with them and Anita Blake. Originally they just killed everyone off in a massive bloody slaughter, but apparently that's not happening here.

These vampires are different from the Blake ones, so they have different powers. It's a crossover I guess.

Still, enjoy.
( Darkness falls on St. Louis )

( In which Kippur analyzes the differences in tactics between Orion's court and Blake's vampires )

Title Hostile Take Over
fandom Anita Blake
Summary Anita Blake and the St. Louis vampires have to deal with the strange contingent from Los Angeles when all the Masters have come to their city.
Rating PG-13
Note Orion, Lan, Kev and Maddy belong to canadianevil she's just letting me borrow them. Alec, Trever and Kale belong to me. Hamilton's characters belong to her.

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The ball was in full swing, and I as Prince Charming entered, catching everyone's attention. Perhaps I was both Prince Charming and Cinderella. Jean-Claude managed to convince me to wear a little black dress. Hardly practical as the top was too low and the bottom too high. The strapy high heels almost made me wobble as they were four inches high. I couldn't understand how people could walk in them. Looking around, I could see all the Masters mingling with the air of people playing Russian roulette. Who would be the one to start off the explosion that could happen between them all.


( Read on pigeons! )

Right, so that entire bit about Anita and the others ignoring Travis in favor of petty squabbling has resulted in this:

Title: Swiftly Moving Storm
Fandom: Anita Blake
Word Count: 1,020
Notes: Kale and Trever are mine. Every one else belong to Laurell K. Hamilton. The parts in italics are from page 367 Danse Macabre

( The swiftly moving storm )

Story Hostile Takeover
Chapter End Game
Fandom Anita Blake.
Rating Adult.
Summary Anita learns the price of inviting strange vampires into her home. Or at least the strip club.
Notes *GASP* It's finished! Or at least this is the last chapter before the epilogue. Which is also finished!
Notes II As mentioned before, Lan, Maddy, Kev and Orion belong to canadianevil who has kindly allowed me to use them for my evil purposes. Alec, Kale and Trever mine. Anita and the others belong to LKH. She can have them.


And there they were. Two lost little puppies... and Kev. I honestly wished I could get rid of him, but the twins were insistent. Lan would be devastated without him. They also said that Kev would do whatever Lan told him to do. While not entirely reassuring, it would have to do. Lan had dressed in tight black leather pants with a silvery t-shirt. It went well with his tumbled down, night-black, hair accentuating his deep brown eyes. Alec wore tight fitting jeans with blue, untied, Converse sneakers and a blue dyed leather jacket that covered up his shirt but not the velvet collar around his neck with word "puppy" on it. Kev wore loose jeans and a blood-red shirt that clashed, almost, with his hair. The shirt had faded stains on it which reminded me of bloodstains. He was probably a messy eater. They all carried designer duffel bags.

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