Dec. 31st, 2014 07:42 pm
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First off, for people wondering what happened to the Wikispace site. They decided to start charging for use of the free wikis. I've started moving things over to a wikia which can be found Here however it's very slow going because of having to transfer pages by hand. At least I don't have to type them up all again!

That being said here is our next chapter:


In which we get too much unneeded background about a possible tunnel, Eragon says he’ll go and find the tunnel to try and open up the gates. People think it’s a bad idea. He’ll go anyway. Oh, and he’ll ask a small child to go into a potentially dangerous situation that people don’t want full grown adults who are combat capable to go into.

In some ways this chapter plays out like the Council of Elrond. All the main characters gather around to discuss something of great importance and deal with it. There’s discussion of it’s history which includes some bloody wars and then the volunteering of people to go on the dangerous journey. However, it isn’t as long as the Council of Elrond, thankfully. For while the Council of Elrond does, admittedly drag on a bit, if Paolini were trying to do something of equal length and breadth people might die by my hand because I seriously doubt that he’d be able to make it readable.

The beginning of the chapter has Nasuada not being able to get what Jeod tells her about how this tunnel came to be. It involved a dwarf clan helping a king build fortifications in the place that would become Dras-Leona. It’s presented in such a way that it feels like Paolini is throwing in some world building for world building’s sake. The history of the tunnels isn’t really that relevant and Jeod is telling her the story about it and then later on brings out the map. It would work better if the map was out when he was telling her about it and not bringing it out a few pages into the chapter.

In any case they discuss who should go and it gets rather confusing. Eragon says that he could go and search for the tunnel - because they’re not exactly sure where it is. It takes Nasuada a moment to come up with a plan: Have some people sneak in through the tunnel and open the gates. Really, this takes her a while, Nasuada fell silent again, and everyone in the pavilion, including Eragon, waited to see what she would come up with. At last she stirred and said, “This: we send a small team of warriors to open the gates from the inside.. The fact that she’s sitting around quietly enough that she has to stir, indicates either she fell asleep or spaced out. Something that required her to be still for quite a long time. You don’t stir after a moment’s thought. You stir after sleeping. Once again, the thesaurus shows. There’s nothing wrong with saying, “after a moment’s thought she said…”

Orik wants to know how someone is supposed to manage that and Eragon says - once again - that he can do it. This time, instead of getting brushed off, his “words had an immediate, chilling effect on the conversation”. Why? I don’t know. There’s nothing really different in this situation than the one he spoke of a few minutes before. Where they said, no he shouldn’t do it because they needed him around in case Murtagh did shit. Nothing he says or does indicates it requires chilling of the conversation. It’s not like Eragon said, “I’m pregnant with Galbatorix’s baby.” Which would definitely bring all conversation to a dead stop. He was just repeating what he said before.

Oh, and as a side note, continuing my justification that the “Mercy Dragon Rider” chapter in Brisingr was just in there as a random encounter - Eragon says that he knows how to hide himself from people using his magic so he won’t be seen. Which apparently he didn’t have time to do, despite them being over a mile away, in the Mercy chapter.

This time Nasuada is okay with Eragon going into the tunnels -which is far more dangerous than just looking for the tunnel’s entrance - and does it without a fight. Everyone else protests, of course. But she says that no one would dare kill Eragon. I’m not exactly sure why. We’ve not seen that before. This goes back to the lack of continuity between chapter to chapter that is found so often in these books. Suddenly no one would dare kill Eragon - when earlier in the book everyone was more than happy to try.

Why? Because they need a good justification for Eragon to go. Even though this will turn out to not be true in a later chapter.

Arya also volunteers to go. Nasuada’s objection to her going? She’s afraid the queen of the elves won’t help the Varden any more if she dies. Because helping save the world from a Great Evil isn’t a good enough reason to continue to help the Varden. It really takes down the threat level of Galbatorix if the queen of the elves might not continue to help just because her daughter died.

After assuring Nasuada that her mother won’t remove her support, Arya is allowed to go. They will take a red shirt - I mean one of Blodhgarm’s spell casting elves and Angela. Angela wants to go because… reasons. Well, because she has a grudge against the priests of the Evil Mountain. She’s turning out to be a bigger Mary Sue than Eragon is. After all, she’s powerful, mysterious, she can go and do things other people can’t, has mysterious powers… is eccentric and annoying but no one really cares. They treat her with wisdom, etc. etc. etc.

The final thing Eragon suggests is to talk to Elva and see if she would accompany them. Maybe this time she’ll feel differently. Because her repeated nos and fucks off aren’t indication about how she feels. The fact that during conflicts she ends up curled up in a ball barely able to breath or move isn’t a good reason to leave her alone. The fact that she’s a child less than three years old, is a great reason to have her accompany them. Because putting her in danger that is risky for grown and powerful spell casters such as Eragon isn’t at all a bad idea. I’m not sure why they keep on trying to do these things to her, always asking her for help in ways that will end up giving her more pain. That’s not helping her, that’s harming her. Of course she wants nothing to do with them. Yet they can’t seem to understand this concept.

It’s this sort of thing that just makes me more and more disgusted with the so called heroes of this story. I’m still not even sure what her powers are and how they would be helpful, but the fact that they keep on trying to press her, especially when it’s so …. dangerous for her, is just cruel and despicable
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