http://clio-1.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] clio-1.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] kippurcritiquesbadbooks 2012-01-28 02:31 am (UTC)

the thick layer of smoke that hung over Belatona like a blanket of hurt, anger, and sorrow.

Oh that's bad. Paolini's going for "it looks cool", and forgetting about the whole sense-making thing. What does a blanket of hurt, anger and sorrow look like?
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